Free writing critique: The Ill-Made Witch by Mandy Keene 3

Many thanks to Mandy Keene who has sent us an excerpt from her novel, The Ill-Made Witch. We’ll leave this post live for a week, during which time we’ll welcome any constructive comments. At the end of the week, the author will receive a free critique from one of our writing tutors. (If you’d like to share your work for critique, please see here for all the necessary information.)

Extract

Chapter 1


Mattie hated hospital food.

Today it was bread that was older than she was. She had no appetite, but all her movements were being watched. Everything, from the beeping of the pulse monitor to each sentence she said. But there was no point complaining to anyone. She could almost hear their replies: “Well, you landed yourself here.” More…

Free writing critique 1: The Princess of Azbar by John 4

online writing tips logoMany thanks to John who has sent us an excerpt from his novel in progress, The Princess of Azbar. This is the first in our new series of online workshops. We’ll leave this post live for a week, during which time we’ll welcome any constructive comments that can help John with his writing. At the end of the week, John will receive a free critique from one of our writing tutors.

If you’d like to share your work for critique – anonymously or with your name in neon lights – please see here for all the necessary information. Remember to include a synopsis (we didn’t get one for The Princess of Azbar), and please remember that you can submit excerpts of up to 1200 words.
read excerpt from The Princess of Azbar